Post by apocalypticjay on Jul 13, 2009 3:34:16 GMT -5
I saw you today, you were a fraction Something illusory, pardoning your worth Magnetic yet with a soluble contradiction, Your words delivered in a rampant birth, Strange I desired your tongue so ravenously Mine was painted with a dulling devils rust You a jigsaw of fumbling pieces, yet pretty There was no stopping my inexorable lust All for the love of my loud interjection Catching your window of deep brown splendour You admired my ignorance towards rejection Intoxicating your mind with words so tender I’m the doctor, you’re the glamorous nurse Scalpel of mischief, is there anything worse?
Notes: I understand sonnets are supposed to be a bit lighter and more loving but I can't control my minds darkness.
OOh Jay this was absolutely mind blowing! I love this write whether its a perfect sonnet or not ..(I find the wikipedia iambic pentameter site useful) it's getting the beats right in your head ....
Fantastic subtle inuendo making the reader think and think .... wow you are a superb poet. It's great to see you stretching your talent and imaginiation too, always searching and finding new strengths ... I know you, the perfectionist Much love my dear friend, another fantastic write, they're always so interesting are you writes ... so much going on, always a little complex, I love that Kerry xxxx mwa x