Not only a beautiful love poem, Jamie, but also ideally fitting Terza Rima form!! Almost every tercet contains a gem phrase: one that helps to make the piece shine. The last tercet could be re-phrased to replace two of the three "For's" - but, by the time I read that part, I was swept away in this tender devotion. An absolute treasure of a write. Kudos and Exalt! H x
"Great spirits have always encountered violent opposition from mediocre minds." ~ Albert Einstein
Jamie this was so filled with love and so much adoration. I love this style and you managed to write it with no restrictions showing ... effortlessly. Exalt and well deserved, I would like to see this one in the weekly poem again .... is that allowed? I know you're in it this week Beautiful, Kerry xx
Post by apocalypticjay on Feb 20, 2010 11:00:19 GMT -5
For when you pressed your lips against my own
The sun went down and I saw only stars.
Absolutely gorgeous my friend, breath tankingly so. I only long for such love from another. Your wording and form are crafted beautifully to express the wells of your soul perfectly here. A brilliant piece of writing from and outstanding poet and friend. Exalt