Soldier of God?

[Max]

He walks out of his "clinic" late in the evening
Living his life devoid of purpose and meaning
A wicked man to the core

I kiss my Crucifix and offer God a quick prayer
He tells me that I am to kill the baby slayer
That's what I'm here for

The touch of steel in my hand is vindicating
The depths of Hell are roasting and waiting
As I'm opening the door

"Hi, can I help you?" The heathen asks
For a demon, he sure wears a human mask
I reply, "I'm here to do the Lord's task"
Revealing the revolver, I point it at his heart
I can feel the Lord's light coursing through me
My body and soul light up like a spark
While the blasphemer offers a useless plea

My finger moves instinctively, guided by God
As my pistol howls with genuine delight
I know in my soul that I have done right

Before long the cops arrive, to investigate the sound
They confiscate my weapon and pin me to the ground
I look to the Heavens and smile as the angels sing loud
They say that I've done God proud

The laws of man mean nothing to me
After all, this is but a heathen society
God himself told me to kill the abortion doctor at the clinic
...Or am I just a schizophrenic?

[polonius]

The deliberately trite rhyme adds to the irony of the criminal banality that is part of the madness of the otherwise powerless and insane criminal. The moral contradiction is succinctly and effectively conveyed.

But in my opinion, abortion is too lightly undertaken by many who see children as an inconvenience to otherwise mediocre lives.

[Jamie~poetshare.forumotion.com]

I like the depth here and the real sense of the characters, and don't find the rhyme "trite" at all. This was a really good read, but if I'm being honest, Max, I'd have stopped before that last stanza. It doesn't really add anything and the penultimate one is much stronger. I don't think it's necessary to spell it out like your current last two lines do, you've communicated what this was about early on. At least that's my opinion.

*exalt*

[apocalypticjay]

I liked the contradiction of this piece, one man working for good to take the life of another working for those who have made 'mistakes'. The contradiction for me is that the story in the poem seems to be that of a righteous man who as you put at the end seemingly insane taking the life of a sane man who is seemingly metally stable but doing ungoldy work...Brilliant! Loved it!

[exmrn27]

Reminds me of that one movie with Bill Paxton and Mathew Mcoughney, in which his father was said to have been ordained by god to kill " bad people" who were supposely demons. He basically has god on his side, and strange things happen during these " missions" in which the said target either gets dazed, or something happens to help the father or the son get the upper hand.

In the same instance, his brother is portrayed as the child --- out --- thinking his brother and father are insane ( incidentally you side with the kid because during the movie, he seems to be abused and such by the father for not following his orders). I won't spoil the rest of the story, you really need to watch it. I personally didn't care for the film my self due to my beliefs, but it was still a cliffhanging movie that made you go --- " Damn!".

Nice one

[Dr Fogg]

So many terrible things have been done in Gods name, the abortion debate was done and dusted years ago in Britain.The anti abortionist would happily see unwanted and unloved children swell the popultion. For a modern forward looking society sometimes America seems almost third world in its attitudes.But the poem wasnt about abortion and im rambling. Well done my friend.