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DNA
Sept 6, 2009 9:03:33 GMT -5
Post by Artemis on Sept 6, 2009 9:03:33 GMT -5
Life is a strand of DNA It twists, turns. It maps and burns.
It’s code holds secrets hidden, witheld Your fortune within. Love or in sin.
Created, accuracy within life giving tubes Entwined in a hairs breadth, it even knows death
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DNA
Sept 8, 2009 1:57:58 GMT -5
Post by Max on Sept 8, 2009 1:57:58 GMT -5
I didn't know what to expect from this piece, just based on the title, Kerry. BUT, I never once doubted how unique it would be, graced by the stroke of your able pen. You capture so much of what life is in 6 simple lines. Simply phenominal. Exalt, my friend
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Forest
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DNA
Sept 11, 2009 20:49:35 GMT -5
Post by Forest on Sept 11, 2009 20:49:35 GMT -5
I love the marrying of literal meaning and poetic allusion in this piece, embodied in the very first line: "Life is a strand of DNA"
While our DNA determines our physical existence, our physical existence takes on its characteristics. I enjoyed the gravity of the two last lines as well, the idea of the latter of the meanings creating the former, and that ultimately, death meets both. Quite a complex poem, Kerry! It kind of reflects its subject matter. Excellent work!
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DNA
Sept 14, 2009 13:30:43 GMT -5
Post by carousal on Sept 14, 2009 13:30:43 GMT -5
I have already said Kerry how refreshing it is to witness how you’re poetry is expanding, and here is yet another example. Concise, nailing the subject in a few words, very impressive.
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