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Post by ARTHUR KELLY on May 1, 2009 7:55:29 GMT -5
You,
My love,
Always there,
Through thick and thin;
Steadfast by my side.
Bothered not with riches,
Only how much I love you
And that I do provide for us.
Remaining faithfully beside you
I promise to keep giving you my all |
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Post by Harklight on May 1, 2009 15:31:12 GMT -5
Great form and a loving message in your Etheree. Well done, Arthur! H x
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Post by Jamie~poetshare.forumotion.com on May 5, 2009 10:18:59 GMT -5
Excellent poem of love and devotion, Arthur, and the form is (of course) perfect. Inspires me to try an Etheree of my own!  |
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Post by NewMan™ on May 7, 2009 22:33:22 GMT -5
wow, not only is the view of this poem impressive but the simple yet so true message inside is inspirational. I think this might make a good challenge for us all sometime to try.
I love the first word, in a line by itself, is "you". That tells the reader that the poem is all about someone and the rest is a promise you made to her.
Take care Arthur.
D.
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Post by polonius on May 10, 2009 9:07:47 GMT -5
The love seems to open like a flower blooming fuller with time. A very nice visual metaphor.
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Post by 4rum on Aug 24, 2009 12:46:17 GMT -5
Dear Arthur Kelly;
Your etheree is very well written in message and form. Gentle, yet strong and full of promise you get a lot across in a very short poem.
4rum
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