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Post by Artemis on Sept 2, 2009 16:34:52 GMT -5
Show me a colour and I’ll paint you a mood
Caught up in petals and love is my food.
A fragrance brings memories, they come and they go
Music heard now makes me think back years ago.
Winds of change linger right over my head,
But the more it persists, I just dig in my tread..
The summit is staring, it’s where I belong,
The summit is calling, it’s where I belong.
So show me a colour but I’ll chose my own,
It’s how far I’ve come and it’s how bold I’ve grown.
Fragrances change like the weather my friend,
Feel black, reach out and my strength I will send. |
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Post by NewMan™ on Sept 2, 2009 16:39:17 GMT -5
the color I see is blue, like the sky. It's the color I see when I look at the top of the summit.
This is a beautiful poem, it whispers so gently a soothing rhyme and is a treat to read.
yours,
me.
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Post by Jamie~poetshare.forumotion.com on Sept 2, 2009 18:25:44 GMT -5
Great stuff, Kerry. The underlying nature theme is subtle, as our attention is turned to the colors and fragrances you cast our way, yet they're only distractions from the freedom, love, and positive abundance of emotion in thie write! *exalt*
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Post by carousal on Sept 28, 2009 17:39:34 GMT -5
You are out of the gate and running Kerry, setting free your imagination, doesn’t that feel great? To me your writing is moving on at a pace and I think as with other members here, that Jamie’s place is producing some fine poems; maybe we have just that little more time to read and benefit from other members work and so improve our own.
I enjoyed this piece immensely; I may just alter one word as it fits a tad better
The summit is staring, it’s where I belong.
The summit is calling, it’s where I belong.
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Post by Artemis on Sept 30, 2009 4:35:56 GMT -5
Thank you for the wonderful comments, Cari I agree and I've changed it ... K xxxx hugs
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Post by silverhenge on Oct 28, 2009 0:33:32 GMT -5
What a lovely poem, it's so uplifting  The piece has a great flow too |
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Post by parttimepoet on Oct 31, 2009 20:43:34 GMT -5
This is a beautiful poem. I've read it several times. It has a lovely 'feel good' thing going on, which can only be good! A great rhyme and flow too. Thanks for sharing, *exalt* |
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Post by Dr Fogg on Nov 1, 2009 6:51:47 GMT -5
Yes I agree with Cari you seem to have got your second wind (no pun intended) in your poetry, Im sorry i missed this before but better late than never. Exalt
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The piece has a great flow too 
