Assassin <mild language>

[Sarah]

Calculating being, silent observer
Watching her passing judgment
Target marked, cross hairs aligned
Daring not look her in the eyes
Soulless creature, residing in shadow
What crime did this one commit?
Stray too close?
Or perhaps too far
Did she make you feel uneasy?
Or did she take something
Kept under lock and key?
And now you want it back
Ah, now I see
A black hole where it once lay
You placed her in your witness protection
No one knew she existed but you
And still you hunt her down
Is it fear or guilt that moves your hand?
To keep her from some secret
Well go on sniper, pull the trigger
Dammit she's standing right there!
She'll give back what's yours
But grant her one favor when she does
Pull the damn trigger!
Aim for her head, make the shot count
Because if all you've told her are lies
You'll wish you had killed her
If your aim strays off it's mark.

[Max]

This is a great story, Sarah, but I definitely sense some personal emotion in this piece. The sniper and the target seem to have had a relationship of sorts, and this really plays out like a metaphor that can be interpreted a number of ways. I love pieces like that, excellent write my dear

[Harklight]

Great tension built in the first six lines, Sarah. Though you haven't given it away completely, this sounds much like self-flagellation, two parts of one entity at war: inner-self beating inner-self. "Soulless creature" and "no one knew she existed but you" plus ending demands, especially "if all you've told her are lies" make a very raw and emotional piece. Bravo!! H x

[Dr Fogg]

Mental note to self, "Dont cross Blooming Rose" This was brilliant both technicaly and emotionaly. Exalt