A Name Just The Same

[Harklight]

A Name Just The Same

As the Artisan etched my personal Cartouche
he smiled, deeply bowed and said “Queen”
Being only semi literate in Egyptian ways
I smiled back and asked what did he mean?

Holding an ancient hieroglyphics chart,
pointing to symbols that spelt my name,
he said: “Once a great Egyptian Queen
had a powerful name, just the same.”

With both the mighty lion and a falcon
plus the Sacred River Nile also there,
added to other potent spiritual symbols,
few other names could even compare.

You might well ask, “what’s in a name?”
It’s only a title, a label, less a definition -
then you’d probably be one whose name is
steeped in heritage and years of tradition.

This simple Artisan had done the improbable!
A name I’d felt encumbered with since birth
suddenly lightened with a gentle designation
as I recognised its historical place on Earth.

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[Max]

"You might well ask, “what’s in a name?”
It’s only a title, a label, less a definition -
then you’d probably be one whose name is
steeped in heritage and years of tradition."

BRILLIANT. The concept is fantastic, and you transform the simple sentence of "what's in a name" and run with it with beauty. Exalt!

[polonius]

You need to capitalise the 'w' here: '“what’s in a name?” Harklight. You seem to ignore the convention of using capital letters at the beginning of each line, using them in the context of sentence structure only. But in verse, their purpose has more to do with signalling a line-contained sense, to obviate there is no enjambment.

Otherwise an interesting study and exemplar of the value of the names we carry through life, demonstrating they are more than incidental.

[Jamie~poetshare.forumotion.com]

Harklight, where you write "artisan" I can't help but think "tatooist." I enjoyed the seemingly personal revelation here, and the idea of a heretofore unknown link to the past, a historical connection, is quite appealing. Easy flow and I didn't even notice the rhyme it's so seamless. *exalt*

@p: That seems to be common convention in poetry, from what I've seen, Polonius. I think it's merely a stylistic choice whether to capitalize or not, having little effect on the poem itself.

[carousal]

Confession, I detest tattoos especially on females. Ok I dismount the hobby horse, a neat, tightly written poem, not a single wasted word. Excellent.