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Lament
Dec 28, 2009 21:38:56 GMT -5
Post by Of No Consequense on Dec 28, 2009 21:38:56 GMT -5
Cut off from the
hope of succor.
Exuberance of dawn
extinguished.
Countenance indicating
sorrow of their hearts.
Another breath of
disappointment groping
in the midnight darkness.
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Lament
Dec 29, 2009 12:43:36 GMT -5
Post by Harklight on Dec 29, 2009 12:43:36 GMT -5
This is a terribly sad lament, ONC. Great title for the write, with well-chosen words and phrases to draw readers into this disappointment. So that we can read more of your work, join us as a Poet Share member: it's free! Just click the link in "Welcome" box (RHS, 2nd from top). Harklight x
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Lament
Jan 1, 2010 19:50:20 GMT -5
Post by Jamie~poetshare.forumotion.com on Jan 1, 2010 19:50:20 GMT -5
A bit more powerful than a mere lament, in my opinion. Deft word choice such as "succor" makes this a treat to read; no mean amateurish poetry here. Very nice! Hope you join us!  |
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Lament
Jan 4, 2010 23:21:44 GMT -5
Post by NewMan™ on Jan 4, 2010 23:21:44 GMT -5
Welcome to PoetShare ONC, your write tells of a loss of both love and light. Hopefully the darkness will not last long and love will help everyone make it thru these dark sorrowful nights.
best wishes,
~ Daniel (newman)
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Lament
Jan 5, 2010 8:42:47 GMT -5
Post by Artemis on Jan 5, 2010 8:42:47 GMT -5
Beautiful yet sad piece of writing, please join us your talent shines, Artemis xx
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