Unified Minds of Conquest (Co-Write Max & Jay)

[apocalypticjay]

New York is dimmer than I remember her from childhood
She is burning in the embers of ignorance
I am just one man, but I would save her… if I thought I could

But then again, I am more than a mere mortal man

I’M AN IDEA

Is there no other hero in this city, in this land?

FORGET ALL FEAR

Though the city is broken, I’ll try to heal her with my hand

JUSTICE IS NEAR

If I am the first to rise from my knees, follow my lead in this stand

INTO THE CLEAR

Where Lady Liberty once stood, an imposter stands instead
This Empire state, this entire state, this entire nation
Is but an angel’s noble body, with wicked demons in her head
In such dark times, a dark messiah is needed for salvation
That’s not free air in our nostrils, that’s ash we are tasting

As London caves through some cancer of maintenance far too misunderstood
Wildly writhing in some kind of painful intolerance
I want to leave here, where would I go… and would it do any good?

Then I smile at all liberties, when one makes a stand

FIGHT FOR FREEDOM

A call to all others to take my hand

FORGET NOT THIS KINGDOM

Embrace my thoughts to heal all land

JUSTICE NEVER FORGOTTON

Will anyone take heed the call of one man?

IN A LAND SO ROTTEN

Where Ben stood tall, a boorish tyranny now breeds
The Thames now desolate, dissolved by years of pollution
This devil of merciless domination has planted his seeds
Now veiled from sight, where will be our final confrontation?
No longer will my blades of autonomy lay dormant and in waiting

Our government, our kings rid us of our freedom
I for one say we no longer need them
For I am one of the many beacons
Shining bright in the name of freedom, and equality’s light
There will be no more screams of terror in the night
Nor men and women self-curfewed out of fright

Once more, with pride, the Star-Spangled Banner shall yet wave
This hypocrisy of democracy is on its way to an overdue grave
When gunshots cease and the rubble clears, we’ll make a better place

For too long, we have all worn blinders and ignored the right to see
WELL WAKE UP, America, and renew the spirit of Lady Liberty
As the lions who govern us move towards fascism, I say we counter
WITH ANARCHY

Some blood must spill, in the name of the masses
Let revolution ring, for time moves slower than molasses

Sirs, silent keepers of our destinies
I hope you come prepared for justice
For my death will be salvation for all believers
No more tears will spill on the streets we played
No more dreams shattered by gluttony’s wrath

The Union Jack will cover my wounds like wings of God
You will lay in blackened tar, sinking in your worthless despair
When my dagger penetrates your soul, I hope the devil measures you

Now men of lands once lost can look with new eyes
STAND TALL, Britain beat the hearts of kings once more
See with eyes of loyalty, we, not I free royalty of man
WITH INSURRECTION

As I feel you comfort my side and lift your vengeance
Let upheaval begin. We shall conquer their emergence

[Foundling]

Hello Max and Jay ... so, who's from USA and who's from UK? The two parts, along with holding their identity, merge into a very similar mindset. I feel the parts in bold letters and the hopeless, with determination to try, in the italics. A very worthy uprisal against morally bankrupt causes - killing them doesn't seem right but sign me up! Beau

[Artemis]

Gosh this write is absolutely stunning! You both fit together so well and this was a darned brilliant piece. I hear you both too ... Max I know you love New York Jay you write so well I just couldn't really tell ... magnifico to both .... Kermit xx ;D

I just read it again, I'm astounded ... I think I know Jays bits (wink) God that sounded wrong on all accounts hehe ... YOU KNOW WHAT i MEAN ...

Best thing I've read in ages ... Kermit xx

[Jamie~poetshare.forumotion.com]

The first thing that strikes me is the rhyming of "idea" with "fear"--sure you're not from New England? Sure sounds like a Maine accent to me. lol

On a more serious note, while I feel your frustration in this I can also sense your youth--both of you--as I used to feel this way myself. Sincerely fed up with the wrongs that government does in the name of "civilization," it often seems so easy to dismiss the whole concept, ready to raze to the ground and build anew.

Except that an examination of history shows that we've done that. Time and time and time and time and time and time again. Anarchy would only mean more lost lives.

This write really makes the reader think, though, if they're not buckled down to their predisposed notions of the world. So a poet would do well and ponder quite a long time here.

I can't help but think of the famous Jefferson quote, "The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots and tyrants." Government power, unchecked, runs rampant trying to protect itself. 'Tis the nature of the beast. And it's the nature of people to get fed up when trod on by said beast.

But I also always try to remember this quote from George Washington, in his farewell address:

In proportion as the structure of a government gives force to public opinion, it is essential that the public opinion be enlightened.

Washington knew, you see, that it is all to easy for a Mob Mentality to cause temporary change, but sustainable change required independent, enlightened thinkers who keep more than the immediate situation in mind.

So what's the solution? I don't know. But Anarchy leads only to death.

Food for thought. *exalts* for both on a powerfully passionate and well written piece.

[Dr Fogg]

Well i'm no youngster but I am a wiz with remotely detonated home made bombs, so count me in lads. Today being Nov 5th is a good day to blow up those self serving MP's and their disgusting expense accounts. A brilliant co-write, more please.