Sarah
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~Everything happens for a reason~[ss:Autumn]
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Post by Sarah on Aug 31, 2009 22:01:03 GMT -5
Disturbing images bombarding my psyche
Inconceivable pain flooding all senses
So many things left unsaid
Taunting each and every waking moment
Asking myself what has been kept from my eyes
Never resting until exhaustion encompasses my mind
Calling out to you, begging you to hear
Every night, eyes held open, for maybe, just maybe
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Post by NewMan™ on Sept 2, 2009 10:50:46 GMT -5
ooh Sarah,
this is really good. Distance is something I personally have to deal with every time I want to be with the woman I love but Distance and I have come to an understanding.. At night, when I dream, the distance goes away and is replaced by feelings I can not yet know.. during the day, the distance comes back and erases my memories of my dreams.
when I read this poem (twice) there was a line that really stood out to me.. It is Asking myself what has been kept from my eyes.. This speaks of secrets, of a trust misplaced.. I can remember those days, far into the past, when I should have asked myself the same question..
Really a wonderful job. Take care,
~ Daniel
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Post by Artemis on Sept 2, 2009 12:05:25 GMT -5
Sarah this made me feel so sad. I know that feeling too, I can relate to you and Daniel on this matter. Very expressive, sorrowful write. K xx
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Post by apocalypticjay on Sept 6, 2009 8:46:27 GMT -5
Distance can be that of a taunt my friend, and indeed everything you express in this piece can break you. You have to be strong and take each day like water flowing yet not always stable hehe, excellent write Sarah really deep!!
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