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Post by Max on Aug 1, 2009 15:21:14 GMT -5
My mind’s spiral is driving me insane Searching incessantly, so thoroughly, I contemplate Yet I have only scratched the surface And I cannot wait to see the treasures that dwell under the skin Swelling wisdom lies locked behind the gate I’ve been given an emerald key that may lead the way Through inner struggles, I have earned this: The right to all of the fruit of the tree, my original sin A pre-meditated fire I am soon to cast Upon a fist-full of curious fabled grass When ancient insights come to pass Into my mind, from behind smoked glass I will tell you all of the secrets I have learned Once I have experienced the mystical burn But you’re going to have to be patient until My third eye Has been pried Open wide If you have no idea what the f@$% I just said, feel free to PM or ask in your comment
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Post by Artemis on Aug 2, 2009 4:47:09 GMT -5
Max I have to say you are one of my favourite writers. Your work just inspires me and makes me think, that's what I like. I just get the impression here you are confused, trying to make your way in the world and sometimes struggle to make sense of it all ... like many. The artwork you use is phenomenal, this write is deep and thought provoking. Love the reference to the third eye too ... imo a part of our brain (perception)which is rarely used and has potential to do great things ....I loved it. K xx
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Post by apocalypticjay on Aug 6, 2009 14:01:16 GMT -5
Am I wrong to say that this reminds me of the Legends of Zelda hehe. A very personal mix of fantasy and your imagination in these deep metaphors for your own reflective feeling of life, another great write Max
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Post by Jamie~poetshare.forumotion.com on Sept 28, 2009 19:38:55 GMT -5
This reads like a vision-quest to me, very ethereal with a touch of mythos to it. Smoky, if that makes sense.
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